Saturday, September 11, 2021

Every Breathe Counts

     The Sunday Muse#177




Walking on a tight rope

A generation moved on

Learning and unlearning

An array of experiences.


There were times

When the skin felt alive

Hooked on a string

Like counting hours.


Now, a twist felt

Not only in bones

But also in every breathe

As one strings the

Shades of salt and pepper.


Still, there is joy

Flowing in the veins

With a slight wobble here

And a deep whisper there

Stands strong, a diehard believer

On unsteady hands.




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31 comments:

  1. Anyone who can do a handstand is a hero in my book!

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  2. Yes, there still is joy among we believers. Smiles.

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  3. This is absolutely lovely Sunita!! There is definitely a twist felt and a change in our older years, but you have painted it here with hope and beauty!

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    1. Your comments always raise the bar for me to give my best shot at your prompts. Thank you, Carrie :)

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  4. Beautiful language throughout. Wonderful. Especially this - "There were times / When the skin felt alive / Hooked on a string /
    Like counting hours" Wow!!!

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  5. This is so beautiful. I too saw ancestors in the image. You second stanza is amazing.

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    1. Thank you very much, Susie. Your appreciation matters :)

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  6. This is a peace-inducing meditation. Beautiful.

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    1. I am glad you liked the poem, Lisa. Thank you :)

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  7. A beautiful person, Sunita. I like the thought of
    "joy Flowing in the veins." I think I've experienced
    that a few times, never thought of it that way.
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    1. You definitely must have felt that joy. You inspires us with your thoughtful poems and focused views. Thank you very much, Jim :)

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  8. luv the fact that joy is still braided in
    Happy Sunday

    much❤love

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  9. Love that second stanza. And the tightrope walk never seems to get any easier.

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    1. It never does. Everyday is a struggle. Thank you :)

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  10. Love this!! The banked and flaring embers are very much felt.

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    1. I am glad you liked this poem, Chrissa. Thank you :)

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  11. 'still there is joy' - beautifully poignant poem.

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  12. Such lovely thoughts here. The poem is truly a meditation on aging. It resonates with me.

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    1. Glad to know the poem touched you, Mryna. Thank you very much for passing by. What a beautiful name you have :)

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  13. There is a gentle flow to your poem, the message incredibly relevant. Beautiful write ......

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    1. Your comment much appreciated, Helen. Thank you :)

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  14. I like the use of twist in your poem. Today, breath is indeed a gift.

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