Day 26, OctPoWriMo-2015
A transparent cycle of memories
Flash against the pillars
Memories of a lost time
Pillars of a past life
Time seeped in images
Life interlaced in whorls
Images of a youthful bliss
Whorls of lush fields
Bliss surrounding the sandy dunes
Fields of swaying laughter
Dunes of mud huts
Laughter danced within their walls
Huts cocooned with warmth.
Walls now shadow the soul
Warmth caged in a concrete foil
Soul trapped in an appearance
Foil of grace and perfection
Appearance of a role model
Perfection faked for the mirrored wall.
Poetry prompt. The above image #OctPoWriMo
Loved the emotion captured in :
ReplyDelete" Walls now shadows the soul
Warmth caged in a concrete foil
Soul trapped in an appearance
Foil of grace and perfection "
Thank you very much Amrita :)
Deletewalls now shadow the soul... hmm.
ReplyDeleteCongratulations on doing this loop ... {Y}
Beautiful - you transmit a deep sadness in this powerful write - it speaks so loudly to me .. Bastet
ReplyDeleteThere is sadness in every change. Thank you very much Bastet :)
DeleteI like how she's kind of trapped in a "loop" of emotions and circumstances!!
ReplyDeleteGlad to know that you liked it, Carol :)
DeleteLoved the way you have used the loop form to express a range of emotions, great write.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Nithya :)
Deleteexcellent.
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Deleteit does fit the loop and word prompt perfectly.
ReplyDeleteThanx a lot Benji :)
DeleteOooo. That last line says it all, and I love your use of the form.
ReplyDeleteThank you for the appreciation, De :)
DeleteMystical poem with an incredibly strong last line. I love what you've done with this!
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Angela :)
DeleteI love this--it just flows effortlessly!
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Thank you Adam :)
DeleteProfound and poignant.
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
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