Tuesday, October 23, 2018

The Song of my Desires

Day-24 OctPoWriMo-2018
Prompt: Opening (Form: Free Verse)








I am a flowing stream

Don't bind me

In worldly tangles.

 Let me go...let me flow...

Let me grow...


I have my own meandering waves

Let me feel the open air

The breathing fragrant nature

My companion and lover

Let me go...let me flow...

Let me grow...



Don't control my spirit

The spirit as old as time

I count the stars at night

I  feel the warmth of the sun.

Let me go...let me flow...

Let me grow...


My skin reflects 

The human face

There are many secrets 

Hiding in my warm heart.

Let me go...let me flow...

Let me grow...


Open my heart and see

Blushing lovers passions

Sad swelling of lost desires

An ancient chime of raging seasons

Let me go...let me flow...

Let me grow...


Control me, and you will find

A stagnated, stinking, slimy rhyme

Lost in the grimy sludge

Running out of time

Let me go...let me flow...

Let me grow...


Don't barricade my extending wings

My destination is waiting for me

Let my bosom feel the passion

The thousand miles of breathing visions

Let me go...let me flow

Let me grow...





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14 comments:

  1. This is an amazing piece, and the photograph fits with it perfectly. I often wonder what I could have become if I had been allowed to BE.

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    1. That "If" plays a huge role in forming our personalities.Taking a chance need courage. Glad to know you liked these rambling thoughts :)

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  2. This is a great poem and I particularly like the stanza about what happens when you are controlled as it is so contrasting and the 'stagnated, stinking, slimy rhyme' is legendary!

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    1. Yes,control the free spirit and see it dies. Thank you,Sam :)

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  3. Sunita, the flow of your beautiful poem flows with the sentiments.

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  4. Such a beautiful flow of words! If only all of us are allowed to truly 'be'! Lovely Sunita.

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  5. Let me go
    Let me flow
    let me grow....beautifully put... true free spirit.. sr

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    1. Free spirit in words,need to be in actions. Thank you :)

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  6. I enjoyed reading this but it would gain immensely from editing by as much as 50%? If you halved the poem and focused entirely on your main theme. Try it and see what you think. I wouldn't comment if I didn't enjoy the poem.

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    1. Thank you, Graham, for the honest opinion. I would have contained it if I could. I wanted to write a song, so got carried away.

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  7. I love the openness of your poem.

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    1. Thank you, Barbara. Had to open my heart to feel alive :)

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