Day-24 OctPoWriMo-2018
Prompt: Opening (Form: Free Verse)
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Prompt: Opening (Form: Free Verse)
I am a flowing stream
Don't bind me
In worldly tangles.
Let me go...let me flow...
Let me grow...
I have my own meandering waves
Let me feel the open air
The breathing fragrant nature
My companion and lover
Let me go...let me flow...
Let me grow...
Don't control my spirit
The spirit as old as time
I count the stars at night
I feel the warmth of the sun.
Let me go...let me flow...
Let me grow...
My skin reflects
The human face
There are many secrets
Hiding in my warm heart.
Let me go...let me flow...
Let me grow...
Open my heart and see
Blushing lovers passions
Sad swelling of lost desires
An ancient chime of raging seasons
Let me go...let me flow...
Let me grow...
Control me, and you will find
A stagnated, stinking, slimy rhyme
Lost in the grimy sludge
Running out of time
Let me go...let me flow...
Let me grow...
Don't barricade my extending wings
My destination is waiting for me
Let my bosom feel the passion
The thousand miles of breathing visions
Let me go...let me flow
Let me grow...
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This is an amazing piece, and the photograph fits with it perfectly. I often wonder what I could have become if I had been allowed to BE.
ReplyDeleteThat "If" plays a huge role in forming our personalities.Taking a chance need courage. Glad to know you liked these rambling thoughts :)
DeleteThis is a great poem and I particularly like the stanza about what happens when you are controlled as it is so contrasting and the 'stagnated, stinking, slimy rhyme' is legendary!
ReplyDeleteYes,control the free spirit and see it dies. Thank you,Sam :)
DeleteSunita, the flow of your beautiful poem flows with the sentiments.
ReplyDeleteThank you,Lili :)
DeleteSuch a beautiful flow of words! If only all of us are allowed to truly 'be'! Lovely Sunita.
ReplyDeleteYes,if only :) Thank you,Punam :)
DeleteLet me go
ReplyDeleteLet me flow
let me grow....beautifully put... true free spirit.. sr
Free spirit in words,need to be in actions. Thank you :)
DeleteI enjoyed reading this but it would gain immensely from editing by as much as 50%? If you halved the poem and focused entirely on your main theme. Try it and see what you think. I wouldn't comment if I didn't enjoy the poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Graham, for the honest opinion. I would have contained it if I could. I wanted to write a song, so got carried away.
DeleteI love the openness of your poem.
ReplyDeleteThank you, Barbara. Had to open my heart to feel alive :)
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