Day-1 OctPoWriMo-2018
Prompt : Surrender
Image credit:Sneha
Let them flow
Those twisting
Jostling open wounds
There is an oasis to feel and explore
There is an oasis to feel and explore
A running stream of emotions
Dance to the tune of
Deep understanding
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Wake up, face it
That sweet pain of
Being alive
There is nothing more to compromise
There is nothing more to compromise
When the heart feels
The rhythm of
Self love.
Self love.
I love the three exclamation points! That conveys so much with so little.
ReplyDeleteThank you very much, Shuku. I read your poem. It shook me.Such a profound rant. I can understand that pain as I too come from a similar background. A tale of every woman in the sub-continent.
DeleteThanks for sharing. I enjoyed the verb 'jostling' with the open wounds...
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Sam Allen, for the appreciation. :)
DeleteBeautiful, Sunita! Very evocative. I love how you worded both stanzas, especially the first with letting the wounds flow. But those exclamation points in between convey both adrenaline as in a fight and finally letting go and surrendering completely. Well done!
ReplyDeleteThank you very much Jesi. I just tried to go with the flow. :)
DeleteI agree with Jesi - the urgency, the compelling cry -
ReplyDeleteThat sweet pain of
Being alive
There is nothing more to compromise
When the heart feels
The rhythm of
Self love.
Nicely done!
Jenni...Thank you very much for the honour :)
DeleteThis is so beautiful!❤
ReplyDeleteThank you Richa. :)
Deleteraw and liberating!
ReplyDeleteWords do liberate and emotions find a destination. Thank you Lili :)
DeleteVery nice, like the color of your website, the image goes nicely with it. Have a nice day.
ReplyDeleteThank you Elsie for the compliment. The website gets me back to its environs once in a year. :)
DeleteThe rhythm of self love.. Well expressed. :)
ReplyDeleteThank you Payal. Back to the journey of words. Let me see how long i sustain ;)
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