Monday, October 1, 2018

Breathe In



 Day-1 OctPoWriMo-2018
 Prompt : Surrender





Image credit:Sneha

Let them flow
Those twisting
Jostling open wounds
There is an oasis to  feel and explore
A running stream of emotions
Dance to the tune of
Deep understanding
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Wake up, face it
That sweet pain of
Being alive
There is nothing more to compromise
When the heart feels
The rhythm of
Self love.


16 comments:

  1. I love the three exclamation points! That conveys so much with so little.

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    1. Thank you very much, Shuku. I read your poem. It shook me.Such a profound rant. I can understand that pain as I too come from a similar background. A tale of every woman in the sub-continent.

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  2. Thanks for sharing. I enjoyed the verb 'jostling' with the open wounds...

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    1. Thank you very much Sam Allen, for the appreciation. :)

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  3. Beautiful, Sunita! Very evocative. I love how you worded both stanzas, especially the first with letting the wounds flow. But those exclamation points in between convey both adrenaline as in a fight and finally letting go and surrendering completely. Well done!

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    1. Thank you very much Jesi. I just tried to go with the flow. :)

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  4. I agree with Jesi - the urgency, the compelling cry -
    That sweet pain of
    Being alive
    There is nothing more to compromise
    When the heart feels
    The rhythm of
    Self love.

    Nicely done!

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    1. Jenni...Thank you very much for the honour :)

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    1. Words do liberate and emotions find a destination. Thank you Lili :)

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  6. Very nice, like the color of your website, the image goes nicely with it. Have a nice day.

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    1. Thank you Elsie for the compliment. The website gets me back to its environs once in a year. :)

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  7. The rhythm of self love.. Well expressed. :)

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    1. Thank you Payal. Back to the journey of words. Let me see how long i sustain ;)

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