Day-12 OctPoWriMo-2018
Prompt: Torture (Form: Senryu)
Prompt: Torture (Form: Senryu)
Her small universe
filled with tormenting silence
Echoes his comfort ...
filled with tormenting silence
Echoes his comfort ...
The constant heartache
You know what I am talking
Active silence kills...
"The constant heartache
ReplyDeleteYou know what I am talking
Active silence kills..."
All of this. So much power and strength in these three lines. You don't need a dense poem to feel the pain inherent in each word. Fantastic word choice. Your first stanza is wonderful but this second one is like a hammer blow on point, echoing how sometimes pain feels like it just keeps hitting you. I love this one, Sunita. Wondeful job!
Thank you very much Jesi. Really humbled by your appreciation.I was worried, would I be able to justice to this beautiful Japanese form.
DeleteFirst time I am attempting this form. I wrote three and posted two.So, checked again and uploaded the 3rd one and deleted old post. Thank you once again. :)
What Jesi says! I fully agree and couldn't say it any better.
ReplyDeleteAngela..Thank you very much :)
DeleteSo much in so few words.
ReplyDeleteEsther, good to see you again. Pain cannot be elaborated,it has its moments. Thank you for the encouragement :)
DeletePower packed senryu!
ReplyDeleteThank you :)
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